You have selected an interesting, but somewhat unclear advocacy topic. Amy Wang sounds like an inter ...

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You have selected an interesting, but somewhat unclear advocacy topic. Amy Wang sounds like an interesting student advocate (although she may be a Ph.D), but her role in healthcare is unclear in your introduction. The language in your introduction is a bit confusing, and I wasn't certain if the advocate was promoting biotechnology (you should define the field), accessibility or health care innovation. There are some places lacking punctuation, and the use of "In this regard" should probably only be utilized once. As you move forward, it will be necessary to simply your topic in both word choice and breadth. The background section floats from clinical trial participation, to increased presentation of cardiovascular disease to organizations: The Society for Women's Health Research and the Alliance for Women in Science. What is the intended specific outcome of the advocacy? Who benefits and how? Things that would be a useful add in the advocate profile, a background of Amy Wang's educational and personal connection to her advocacy. In the beginning of the paper she sounds like a student, but in the sourcing of your work she has a Ph.D. Once you conduct your interview, Include a direct quote from Amy Wang regarding her experience with advocacy writing. Remember to use sample of Amy Wang's advocacy writing in your final submission. Please make sure you add your interview to your References. Dr. Brown supplied the following resource:interviews_personal_communication.html Best to you ask you move to your revision process on the final module of the session!